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Pale and Cold

Author: Voodoo_Lounge
ASL Info:    21/F/OH
Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408 /588 /171
Words: 44
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Pale and Cold

Depression is catching,
Spreads like a mold.
I silence my head,
I do what I'm told.
This has become
My only life-
The role of empty-headed,
Servile little wife.
My energy drained.
My spirit been sold.
I've never felt so old,
Pale and cold.

Submitted on 2008-05-19 11:53:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Dam*it. You have a knack for bringing out jealousy of your expression and the urge to hug you at the same time lately. I love the first two lines, and that you used a fungus in them to make the analogy, it's very expressive of the perspective you seem to have gained of late. I think you need to get away from everyone but yourself for a week and try to get back to you, before you wind up hating him for taking you away from yourself. I know I did for a while, even though he didn't and it was freely given, it just leads to loathing and sorrow. Please, please, take some you-time, Victoria. :P
| Posted on 2008-08-21 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]

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