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    dots Submission Name: The Lyricistdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    18/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.02 - 97/161/101
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 58
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 277



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    And in my dreams she sings,
    with no words,
    but the melody is beautiful
    she breathes, but the lyrics,
    take mine away,
    then I open my eyes,
    and she's beautiful,
    but the lyrics to her heart,
    are only mine today.




    Submitted on 2008-05-19 12:41:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this was a bit confusing...
    "she breathes, but the lyrics,
    take mine away,"

    and

    "but the lyrics to hers,
    are only mine today."

    i reread these, but still dont get them too well.

    i like the idea and how it started off!
    | Posted on 2008-05-31 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]


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