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    dots Submission Name: Effects on Medots
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    Author: poet09
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 157/162/122
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    dotsEffects on Medots
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    One kiss and I'm under your spell
    a feeling I know all too well.
    Your every wish is my command,
    my entire world in your hands.

    The brightly,blazing, burning fire
    you are my one true desire.
    One touch and I get weak
    it is you only that I seek.

    You always keep me whole,
    the other half of my soul.
    Like the day needs the night,
    in the dark, you are my light.

    You bring out the best in me
    many things I do not see.
    Losing you is sudden death,
    as I took my final breath.




    Submitted on 2008-05-19 16:23:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, this was really good! I liked this a lot. While reading this, I could really relate to it. It's always great when you find that one special someone. Good job! Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2008-05-22 00:00:00 | by mysterious one | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. I liked it very much. I (and many others) know these feelings all to well. It's great to find the other half of you. Im glad you did. About the poem, the rhyming was consistant, but it seems like you should've picked a different rhyme schme. Stringing couplets did't really set the "You are me" mood. Other than that, it was really good. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    »Haely«
    | Posted on 2008-05-20 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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