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    dots Submission Name: Feild of Stonedots
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    Author: koolness
    ASL Info:    17/female/city of evil
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 80/106/56
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsFeild of Stonedots
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    He lays his flowers in the feild of stone,
    It's been seven years, his devotion still goes strong.
    He gave his heart to the one he loved, long ago,
    Time is almost up, time for him to go.
    He closes his eyes just to see her face,
    Soon, he reminds himself, he'll go to that place.
    They lay his flowers in a feild of stone,
    Knowing now he is no longer alone.




    Submitted on 2008-05-19 18:34:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I'm surely positive that you meant to write Field in Olde english. First thing i would like to say is yes the imagery was strong but i didn't feel the emotion in it. The amount of comma's used makes the wording seem choppy, and stopped the flow. Good write but i would like to see more emotion behind the writing.
    | Posted on 2008-05-21 00:00:00 | by silentpoison | [ Reply to This ]
      I could see this pictured perfectly in my mind. And the peace..if you want to call it that, felt at the end of that was... jovial.. or something peaceful in your mind that knows its right.

    Hikaru Yue
    | Posted on 2008-05-19 00:00:00 | by KeeperOfLight | [ Reply to This ]


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