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    dots Submission Name: Through My Eyesdots

    Author: forfila
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 354/310/188
    Words: 239
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsThrough My Eyesdots

    Daunting yet intriguing prospects of doors yet to pass through
    A dawning start to my time now that is post my blindness
    Spawns of this light cradled inside the hands of her
    Our senses our stage to witness them in passive reactions
    Watching and standing content as a fraction to the all

    I was once young and crawling with questions of why
    On fire and falling toward more of the nothing inside the nothing of time
    But in faith and light I found the lord was there to alleviate
    To renew and rejuvenate my drive to push on
    To push through all which locks and encompasses
    That which enforces the encasement
    That which stunts infinity by imposing perimeters
    To re open ends that have become sewn and spiraled into self

    I seem to not ascertain my nows, I know them when they turn to past tense
    Living all moments passing, consuming and absorbing events as a hearts core analyst
    I rush toward the light and mark truths when heart and sight join in fusion to except
    Their separation thus becomes one objectives delusion

    Sensing what was, is and will be with my harness reigning my confusion
    One little servant determined to be so
    Birthing concepts to invoke the further followers to know as I do
    When you serve the light your search is over
    It is the light which will come to find you

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      these peices are not like hot tubs where you want to ease yourself in and bask in saccharine sweetness, more like a natural spring, you want to cannonball in and wallow forever... If you ever get a book published send me ISBN number so I can pick up three copies, one to keep, one to lend out, and one to give away.
    | Posted on 2008-05-26 00:00:00 | by caveman | [ Reply to This ]
      This, to me, is just epic and romantic and relayed and communicated so well!

    I just am at a loss for words! I still can't get on your site - I don't know if it's my dial up or ?

    Happy Trails friend!

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-05-21 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      The theme of light and divinity shine through out this with the clever use of words. It apears to tell a story of the lost now found. I think the story is more personal but with the hope of reaching out to the wayward (mostly because the last two line use you while the remainder of the poem uses I and her).
    | Posted on 2008-05-20 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]

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