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    dots Submission Name: Seasonal politics [Changeinlovers]dots

    Author: every48seconds
    ASL Info:    25/M/toronto
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 123/163/129
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Story/Nature
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    dotsSeasonal politics [Changeinlovers]dots

    And the skies parted
    And the neverending snow melted
    Spring ushered in a new reign
    And the world rejoiced
    I became close with one of the resistance fighters during the time
    Unknown, however, to the new lord
    Summer is a jealous ally
    And soon it acted
    I ran away with her to a safe place
    As it rained heated death on springs offspring
    Spring, powerless to stop it, fell just as winter did
    Far away, we married during this time
    Summer was a weak leader
    And couldn't upload such tyranny
    And it fell as well, the world demanded a new leader
    And my wife demanded seperation
    Fall was chosen, a child of winter, yet kinder
    She clothed the flowers left by spring
    But even she wasn't all powerful
    And her efforts fell to her fathers beliefs
    And once more I came to arms against it
    And such the saga continues

    Submitted on 2008-05-20 05:59:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The seasons were a great add. The seasons almost play the part of an added character in the play. Changing the variables. The story blended well together and never lost the flow. Good write!
    | Posted on 2008-05-21 00:00:00 | by silentpoison | [ Reply to This ]
      It was good the wat you melded the seasons with feelings associated with different powers and such related to politics. It gave a story to blend key words which worked nicely. It reminded me of a fantasy story (I've read) that included the weather and the politics of nations in the decscriptions of moods and settings.
    | Posted on 2008-05-20 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]

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