1st stanza is kickass, that is what caught my attention and i only read things if the first part makes me interested, so you have that down pretty well.
It sounds symbolic and i cant for the life of me ever understand most of cryptic writings, sooo
that means you did an awesome job there cause i cant understand a lot of good [censored]...sadly.
Different* is near eachother in the first and second line. it creates a sort of clashing when you read it.
They rhyme sounds a bit forced near the last line. though that could be me cause i dont do rhymes very wellso really i have no room to speak on that subject
The conviction you place behind your words is amazing i like what you have done with it, i dont know if its frustration or anger but its placed in here very well and its not all in your face screw off sort of thing.
I really really love how its ended. honestly, it wraps this piece up perfectly and it doesnt seem like the ending was placed in because you didnt know what to put, am i making any sense -_- anyway as to what i said to you earlier over all i really like this piece.
im extremely sorry for how short this comment is cause honestly i hate leaving short comments but i dont know what else to say so ill leave it like this -_- sorry!