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Author:	DeadlyDodo
Elite Ratio:	7.99 - 11/12/8
Words:	138

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
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I think this pretty much speaks for itself.

A Thousand Faces dots

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I am a man of a thousand faces
they come from a thousand places
If you look you can see the traces
They don't lead to colours or races

Just different parts of me
Different parts of my history
When I was trapped and couldn't be
All my feelings hold the key

To the origins of who I am
This messed-up complex man
my life's been one big sham
I wear my faces all I can

And now I come to you
Can you see behind, whats true?
Can you understand, do you have a clue?
Is this really me? Or is it all just you!

'Cause I am a man of a thousand faces
they come from a thousand places
If you look you can see the traces
Traces of who I am.

Submitted on 2008-05-20 06:40:11 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
You know, I thought I invented the masks,
I was disapointed to see this piece end.

~Carrie
| Posted on 2008-07-06 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
okay long version,

1st stanza is kickass, that is what caught my attention and i only read things if the first part makes me interested, so you have that down pretty well.

2nd Stanza
It sounds symbolic and i cant for the life of me ever understand most of cryptic writings, sooo
that means you did an awesome job there cause i cant understand a lot of good [censored]...sadly.
Different* is near eachother in the first and second line. it creates a sort of clashing when you read it.

3rd stanza
They rhyme sounds a bit forced near the last line. though that could be me cause i dont do rhymes very wellso really i have no room to speak on that subject

4th Stanza,
The conviction you place behind your words is amazing i like what you have done with it, i dont know if its frustration or anger but its placed in here very well and its not all in your face screw off sort of thing.

5th Stanza
I really really love how its ended. honestly, it wraps this piece up perfectly and it doesnt seem like the ending was placed in because you didnt know what to put, am i making any sense -_- anyway as to what i said to you earlier over all i really like this piece.

im extremely sorry for how short this comment is cause honestly i hate leaving short comments but i dont know what else to say so ill leave it like this -_- sorry!

<3
Nikki
| Posted on 2008-05-20 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]

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