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    dots Submission Name: The Moments We're Living Nowdots
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    Author: MinervaBlu
    ASL Info:    17 nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 240/230/178
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 79
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    dotsThe Moments We're Living Nowdots
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    Forever doesn't matter
    Because it doesn't exist
    Always is just a silly myth
    A promise none can make
    No heart can be given
    With someone still living
    It's in their chest where it should be
    A promise to stay together
    For always and forever
    Is a promise bound to be broken
    Those who say nothing
    Can tear them from their lover
    Are blind bastards waiting
    Waiting for something to happen
    Where the can no longer see one another
    Don't make me promise forever
    Don't make me swear always
    For the only time that matters
    Are the moments we're living now




    Submitted on 2008-05-20 17:25:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmm, my hopelessly romantic self disagrees :(

    Anyways, typo-
    Where the can no longer see one another

    =

    Where they can no longer see one another

    and the end-
    For the only time that matters
    Are the moments we're living now

    I do understand. As far as forever is promise made to be broken, you may be right. But god I hope you arent. Though, its very probable.

    Good write, you have me thinking :)
    | Posted on 2008-06-14 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      Things change through the years, and you'll find that out for yourself as time goes on. Do enjoy yourself NOW and drink in every drop of present that you can 'cause the memories you form will remain. You might as well make these moments grand ones!

    In the fifth line for the bottom, I think you mean "they" where it says "the."

    I can appreciate your pen even though I'm in a different stage of life (and have lived a lot of dreams and am planning to continue to more of them happen).

    :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2008-05-20 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]


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