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    dots Submission Name: I Thought White Was Beautifuldots
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    Author: Seagirl
    ASL Info:    49/yes please/on a beach
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 44/18/35
    Words: 317
    Class/Type: Prose/
    Total Views: 89
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    Bytes: 2158



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    dotsI Thought White Was Beautifuldots
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    Kneeling in the grass
    he sits back on his feet
    and surveys his garden
    the sun glinting
    off his blonde hair
    he plucks and pulls out
    all the weeds and grass
    and the things
    that shouldn't be there
    throwing them in a pile

    He gazes slowly along
    the tiny blooms
    of beautiful dark colors
    burgundy alyssum
    sapphire blue cornflower
    deep red nasturtium
    his dark, exotic beauties
    and his eyes stop abruptly
    on a big, white flower
    wondering how she got there

    Scratching his head, he thinks
    seeds must have been dropped
    by a bird or a chipmunk
    running through his
    little patch of perfection
    he yanks her out
    like the weeds and grass
    and the things
    that shouldn't be there
    throwing her in the pile

    He grabs a handful of dirt
    and jams it into
    the hole she left behind
    carefully arranging the soil
    so there is no trace left
    of where she grew

    He picks up the pile
    of living refuse
    and tosses it into
    a large, dark plastic trash can
    locking the top
    and dragging it to the curb

    Whistling, he saunters
    back to the house
    his little blossoms
    dancing in the gentle breeze
    with their sultry upturned faces
    beautiful in the warm summer sun

    She is slowly wilting
    in this hot, enclosed coffin
    the brilliant white of her petals
    turning brown along the edges
    and she wonders
    why she belongs here in this place
    filled with weeds and grass
    and the things
    that shouldn't be there

    She saw the pleasure in his face
    as he looked over the others
    and was confused that the look
    disappeared when his eyes
    came to rest on her
    felt the pain of being ripped apart
    and thrown away worthless
    her last thought was

    "I thought white was beautiful."




    Submitted on 2008-05-20 18:44:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      She is slowly wilting
    in this hot, enclosed coffin
    the brilliant white of her petals
    turning brown along the edges
    and she wonders
    why she belongs here in this place
    filled with weeds and grass
    and the things
    that shouldn't be there

    She saw the pleasure in his face
    as he looked over the others
    and was confused that the look
    disappeared when his eyes
    came to rest on her
    felt the pain of being ripped apart
    and thrown away worthless
    her last thought was



    And I thought simplicity meant everything
    and being unique was not a vacuum
    but a badge made to differentiate a dream
    from that which is lace and filigree for tombs

    Sorry, just my ramble on this one size fits all personality that didn't quite succumb to something different. Your style for this write was appropriately relaxed enough to allow the reader to grasp whatever meaning they might attach to the white canvas of the white flower. An interesting and wry comment on the clones that pass for beauty in this world.

    Bill
    | Posted on 2008-05-31 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]



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