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    dots Submission Name: Feelingdots
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    Author: annie smith
    ASL Info:    20/f
    Elite Ratio:    5.26 - 75/61/24
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
    Total Views: 564
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 301



    Description:
       its only a feeling.


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    dotsFeelingdots
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    A secret feeling unto my own
    Barly there, scurring unknown.
    Always hidden,masked, disgiesed.
    Ignorance even my mind obliged.
    My heart is pleading to unvail,
    The blinding truth and unseen trail,
    Carefuly drawn out of sight,
    Only felt with in the night.




    Submitted on 2008-05-20 19:48:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I am often a fan of shorter poems like this one. I like when people say things well in short stints rather than showing off how many lofty words they can must up. This is an interesting short poem.

    L2: "Barely there, scurrying unknown"
    (a couple typos)

    I wonder...

    What is the feeling?

    Cheers,
    -Tom
    | Posted on 2008-05-20 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]


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