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    dots Submission Name: Wheneverdots
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    Author: SuperMel
    Elite Ratio:    4.77 - 11/8/12
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 493
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 551



    Description:
       Another poem for the guy I like


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    dotsWheneverdots
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    Whenever I'm around him, I stop breathing. I seam to forget how to talk. I'm shocked by the fact I can still walk.

    Whenever I try talking to him my hands become cold as nice. I love whenever I see a smile on that boys face. It's so nice.

    Whenever I think of him, a smile comes across my face.

    I love the fact he cares, how he's always there. I wish I could hug him as if he were on one my teddy bears.

    He's so sweet, that's why my feelings have become so deep




    Submitted on 2008-05-20 19:52:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good, but theres a couple of spelling errors in it. other than the spelling errors, on the whole, its good. keep it up:)
    | Posted on 2008-06-05 00:00:00 | by Love Hurts..... | [ Reply to This ]


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