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    dots Submission Name: As they crash, a tide away from insanity dots
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    Author: silentpoison
    ASL Info:    22/F/Teh Shire
    Elite Ratio:    2.67 - 204/259/118
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 590
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 368



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       just kinda makes me think


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    dotsAs they crash, a tide away from insanity dots
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    Will you hold my hand
    so we can sail to a different ocean
    where the sunset looks the same
    and the saltwater is to blame
    for my crazy notions
    and unaltered motions
    riding out to the horizon
    you'll be the diversion
    of the waves to the moon
    while the tide pulls away
    all that we believe in




    Submitted on 2008-05-21 00:47:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, this seems also deep but simple, the only thing wrong I can see on first impression is I'd not capitalize the first word if you're not going to capitalize any words following. It seems sad yet hopeful to me, so hopefully that's what you were going for.
    | Posted on 2008-05-23 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      A short but very potent meditation on the possiblity of a better place, a better world... very deftly done throughout! bravo... bravo... bravo... michael
    | Posted on 2008-05-21 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, alright, as a first impression, that kicked ass! really i like it, simple yet not simple you know, like short but not short, it's just good like that, i'm not one to completely praise something but like damn that was good.
    Congradulations!!!!!!
    k.Holder
    | Posted on 2008-05-21 00:00:00 | by every48seconds | [ Reply to This ]


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