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    dots Submission Name: disappointment and other familiar notionsdots
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    Author: wool raincoat
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    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsdisappointment and other familiar notionsdots
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    I.
    Prufrock knew where
    wed spend most of our time.
    And where time would
    spend most of us.

    II.
    What names do the birds
    have for themselves?
    Watch as we become lost
    in the sad generalization.

    III.
    Unfolding the paper doll chain
    is just another example of symmetry,
    and symmetry,
    just another example
    of whats breakable.

    IV.
    An unscientific question:
    Where did the pigeons congregate
    before we paved our cities?

    V.
    Yes, anatomy, but
    how does the skeleton of a ghost
    connect?

    VI.
    You with such
    insufficient postage,
    the world so caught up
    in its invented systems.

    And we ask how.

    VII.
    I hated it most
    when I became a metaphor
    for what I would become.

    VIII.
    We're the nerve agent
    accidently spilt
    and the victims it took,

    the reason Anubis
    smiled today.





    Submitted on 2008-05-21 08:57:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I.
    Prufrock knew where
    wed spend most of our time.
    And where time would
    spend most of us.

    I appreciate the simplicity and depth in this short... well w/e you call these things you have written.

    II.
    What names do the birds
    have for themselves?
    Watch as we become lost
    in the sad generalization.

    I'm deeply interested to know what sparked these thoughts of yours... among the list the first three are the ones that resonate most with me.

    IV.
    An unscientific question:
    Where did the pigeons congregate
    before we paved our cities?

    This one in particular made me laugh.

    Thanks for the write, it was refreshingly unique an in tune with the minds of people today. I am relieved to read something other than broken hearts and depression.

    Cheers,
    -Tom
    | Posted on 2008-05-21 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      IV.
    An unscientific question:
    Where did the pigeons congregate
    before we paved our cities?


    Didn't feathered tufts just slit the wrists of sky
    walker's iconography as moon's drew flocks to their forgotten selves on shelves at the dollar store of time?

    Isn't it about time you made it back this way? Especially since you don't seem to answer e-mails very often?

    I sincerely hope life has been treating you well, Sir Wooly, and that college is the experience you expected it to be. Now, all you need to do is start posting the many writes we've been without since you left. Shouldn't be more than a hundred. :)

    Keep in touch.
    Bill
    | Posted on 2008-05-21 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      well, aren't you a surprise, turning up like you have?

    are you winning the war, justin?
    do tell.

    go on.
    *blam*
    | Posted on 2008-05-21 00:00:00 | by silent strings | [ Reply to This ]
      the reason Anubis
    smiled today.

    most haunting have the questions of why and how and commitment to the now. realization of what we are and where we're going, if going anywhere at all...i for one feel stuck...mud stuck but anyhoo not about me...
    the poem
    i feel disjointed after reading this and i had to reread a few times before it really sunk in enough to be a true feeling.

    pigeons congregated on the ark...if you believe that sort of thing

    i just have too many things going through my head to comment properly...

    good to see a post though..i missed your
    complexed Beauty
    | Posted on 2008-05-21 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]


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