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    dots Submission Name: The Capedots
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    Author: Seagirl
    ASL Info:    49/yes please/on a beach
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 44/18/35
    Words: 236
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 97
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1613



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    dotsThe Capedots
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    Child un-nurtured
    Innocent confusion
    Hurt by idolized parents
    Maybe an accident
    A mistake
    That started a family

    But to him, I'm a hero

    Hurt and angry adolescent
    Surviving on the streets
    Same old story
    Fell in with the wrong crowd
    Too much drink
    Too many trysts
    A bed for two but
    A playground for many

    But to him, I'm a hero

    Self lost
    Respect lost
    innocence, pride, direction
    lost
    Worthless
    Used
    Ashamed

    But to him, I'm a hero

    California
    Far from home
    On my own
    Night clubs, bars
    Naked bodies
    Sand and stars
    Names forgotten
    Or never known

    But to him, I'm a hero

    Stupid choices
    Fatherless son
    Moved back to their torturous home
    As long as my boy gets what he needs
    They can do what they want to me
    Robbed me of my soul

    But to him, I'm a hero

    Left that place
    But old ways returned
    To get through the struggle
    Faced the music
    Weak in bed, barely breathing
    He says I'm strong
    While I want to die

    But to him, I'm a hero

    Life goes on
    Laughter rings through my home
    A man now, tall and strong
    sees I survived it all
    Pride like tiny sprouts through soil
    so fragile

    But to him, I'm a hero




    Submitted on 2008-05-21 14:25:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      A potent, poignant and most touching piece of poetry...powerful. Enough to break a heart of stone.... bravo... bravo... bravo...
    | Posted on 2008-06-11 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazing write, Lisa! Your excellent prose poem reminds me that we judge ourselves much more harshly that most of the outside world does, and especially mothers are always a saintly figure to their sons!

    Well done, lovely lady!
    | Posted on 2008-06-10 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      I think your poem here captures the essence of many a young life......

    Evocative and compelling reading Lisa.

    Superbly written.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2008-06-05 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]



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