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    dots Submission Name: broken clotheslinedots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
    Total Views: 547
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1335



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       i couldnt really fnd the perfect title so if yall could help me id appretiate it. i dont know. but i need a good title. hope you like it.


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    dotsbroken clotheslinedots
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    i feel like you left me hangin high
    and somewhat dry
    on this broken clothesline
    i cant hide
    or disguise
    this feeling makes me ask why
    why do i have to cry
    myself to sleep at night
    even in daylight
    even in a crowd of people, im alone
    and theres no place to call home
    so i roam
    into my dome
    and use the payphone
    and ill call this chick unknown
    and ask a favor
    just so i could try to savor
    this long forgotten flavor
    of your kiss
    its the main thing that i miss
    the thing i remember as bliss
    and i wont let them diss
    you when your gone
    im keeping your name strong
    and even though your gone
    i know it may be wrong
    but i think i may be gone
    before to long
    just cuz i gotta stay strong
    and find where i belong.
    somehow i think its here
    but then i see your no where near
    but i wont give in to this fear
    my path is almost clear
    into your arms
    free from the worlds harm
    i think it may just be your charm
    but im safe with you
    you always knew what to do
    and that why i loved you
    even though i knew
    that all this would happen to you
    but im still true




    Submitted on 2008-05-22 00:34:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      paging Dr. Allcome, it has flow, and bounce, but it's repetitive and unemotional, if that's what you were goin for, good job stick a fork in it, if not grab the paddles...
    | Posted on 2008-05-26 00:00:00 | by caveman | [ Reply to This ]


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