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    dots Submission Name: it never camedots

    Author: ira
    ASL Info:    21.f.ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 238/273/176
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 601
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 988

       it could and all hopes it should, but hasnt yet.

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    dotsit never camedots

    My September never came,
    Thought it would but itís all a game.
    My September never came,
    Leave the lock to rust in the Pouring Pain,
    Feel it truth, the rim with youth,
    My cup was filled with fantasy.
    My September continues to drift,
    Run a-muck on lies under-sheltered ties,
    My September never came,
    Offered the keys, they dried.
    My September locked away, packed the
    Lacking memories, put them on display.
    My picture on the wall a reminder of what
    it couldnít be.
    Write a letter all the same,
    Drifting quietly through this acid fancy-flee,
    No fault but my own.
    My September never came,
    No fault but my own, yes Iíll take the blame.
    Used the patterned made you dance, Iíll drift
    a bit back to my past.
    Forever tied, but no key to unlock this Septembers past.
    No key to lock, no lock to key, September remains but a dream to me.

    Submitted on 2008-05-22 00:54:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hokay, that was good, took me for a ride and left me on the roof, it's one of those "overly comfy couch" pieces, y'know, you sit in it and just sink in and think to yourself, "I will no longer want to get up." Chisel it In Stone
    | Posted on 2008-05-26 00:00:00 | by caveman | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good. I love how it's depressing and yet not clichťd in any way, I also love the word play you used and the way you kept the theme through the entire poem.
    | Posted on 2008-05-23 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
    | Posted on 2008-05-22 00:00:00 | by kiki402 | [ Reply to This ]

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