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    dots Submission Name: Drinker of Dreamsdots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 1034/1090/515
    Words: 245
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 98
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       With apologies to Algernon Charles Swinburne...


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    dotsDrinker of Dreamsdots
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    Ah, lover of immoral pleasures,
    My sister of hot purple schemes,
    You sell all your feminine treasures
    Sweet seller and drinker of dreams.
    You awake when dusk is fast falling
    As ghosts course across the night air
    And smile as those spirits are calling
    You from your lair.

    So long have you vetted and fêted
    Your lovers until they were slaves,
    While you’ve cursed and you’re harried and baited,
    Until they were thrown in their graves.
    You body’s a lean lethal dagger
    That you’ve used to sunder each heart
    So lovely you stroll and you swagger,
    With such dark art.

    Your eyes are huge coins shining golden,
    Your red lips are curled in a sneer,
    My qualms only serve to embolden
    My sadistic pale Princess of Fear;
    My dreams you now quaff and so drain them,
    And make inky black what was white,
    All my hopes you now brake and distain them
    Here in the night.

    Though I’m beaten with rods and with truncheons
    In the reeds by these nightmare streams,
    I’ve escaped from your claws and your dungeons,
    My amorous drinker of dreams.
    You are evil, rapacious and lonely,
    As all of your spleen you will spend,
    So crushed and lifeless that only
    God alone might mend.





    Submitted on 2008-05-22 10:45:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A sparkle of every spice needed to make one's rivers foam with fantasies. I like that it a little bold, a little restless, with a notch of darkness that actually uplifts it and gives it color. The aesthetics of words is what mesmerizes me to the fullest and I take entirely "immoral pleasures" in it.

    It's been a long time now "Sweet seller and drinker of dreams".
    | Posted on 2008-05-27 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      I did enjoy the descriptiveness of this piece!
    You brought the "drinker of dreams" to life with your words.
    The only part I did not like was this
    "You are evil, rapacious and lonely,
    As all of your spleen you will spend,

    I did not like the "spleen" part.
    Threw things off a little bit but I did love the rest of it " So crushed and lifeless that only
    God alone might mend."

    Very good rite

    | Posted on 2008-05-23 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the title "Drinker Of Dreams"!

    This is delightful:

    'Ah, lover of immoral pleasures,
    My sister of hot purple schemes,
    You sell all your feminine treasures
    Sweet seller and drinker of dreams.'

    I'm a recovering alcoholic, and this amazing verse reminded me of some wild times in the olden days (as they say)!

    Excellent as always, my talented friend in letters!!
    | Posted on 2008-05-22 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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