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It Aches To Even Be


Author: Voodoo_Lounge
ASL Info:    21/F/OH
Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408 /588 /171
Words: 52
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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It Aches To Even Be


Secrets and recollections
So powerless to forget,
Time keeps on passing on
Free I am not to be let.
Wolves wear sheeps clothing,
This sheep once had fleece-
Beaten down and jaded now,
I know I'll never have release.
Sometimes It aches
To even be....
How could
Do this to me?




Submitted on 2008-05-22 13:42:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Something I noticed while reading. The last two lines, the person culpable is left out. Seems a little like a Freudian slip there, to me. Would it be worse if it were you, if it were him, or if it were some faceless, unnamed force in your life? Life gets the best of us down, and I'm very, very sorry for the pain expressed here. If you ever need to talk, please, feel free to IM me. I'm nearly always on.
| Posted on 2008-08-21 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]


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