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The Prophecy


Author: Voodoo_Lounge
ASL Info:    21/F/OH
Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408 /588 /171
Words: 27
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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The Prophecy



To sit here with you
Alone in this room
Fortells a prophecy
Of frustration and gloom.
I must force my body
To keep ahold of my soul.




Submitted on 2008-05-22 13:46:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I know the feeling conveyed at the end of this very, very well. It's really odd at times. Try to make peace with it and see where it takes you. I love the concise way you write, the despair captured in so few lines. It's exquisite, wonderful work.
| Posted on 2008-08-21 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]


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