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    dots Submission Name: "The Pedestrian And The Volkswagen"dots

    Author: Ron Cole
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 2383/1715/240
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    dots"The Pedestrian And The Volkswagen"dots

    A pedestrian crossing a city street
    was run over by a Saint Bernard
    who was speeding after a neighbor's cat
    from a nearby yard.

    Upon attempting to arise,
    the pedestrian was again
    run over by a Volkswagen
    which came speeding around the bend!

    A concerned passerby
    helped the man from out the street,
    and expressed in an excited voice
    "I'm surprised you can take your feet"!

    Wherupon the hapless pedestrian,
    quite stunned by the whole affair,
    said the big dog wasn't so bad
    what with all that fluffy hair;

    but that tin can he was dragging
    man, I gotta say,
    knocked the tar outta me
    and nearly ruined my day!!!!!

    Ron Cole
    May 2008

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       Hilar-ious, if laffs was medicine, I'd be the wellest man in town.
    "TIN CAN" loved that line, can almost feel his feelings, thanks Ron.
    | Posted on 2011-05-09 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      Brilliant! Hilarious! Was not expecting the punchline...well done.
    | Posted on 2008-09-10 00:00:00 | by suneideises | [ Reply to This ]
      Although your rhythm was slightly off I can say that this poem is absolutely brilliant, original and hilarious!!!!!
    Loved it

    | Posted on 2008-09-01 00:00:00 | by Roselize | [ Reply to This ]
      he he he!!! My son's grandparents had a huge St. and they had to replace a few doors that were knocked down by the pup!

    I like a good morning giggle!
    lots of love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-08-29 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      heh i like it :) st bernards are my boyfriends fave dog so it even made me smile just cause of that (he's in the army again for the next 4 weeks). ty again for the smile. love n luck xx

    | Posted on 2008-05-28 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]
      ROTFLMAO, Please, Please, let me know if I can share this with my buddies at work, they'll definitely dig it. cant think of any critiques or advice, Chisel it In Stone
    | Posted on 2008-05-26 00:00:00 | by caveman | [ Reply to This ]
    | Posted on 2008-05-24 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      I needed a good laugh this morning, and you've dished that right out of a tin can, Ron! Very enjoyable poem with a great ending. :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2008-05-24 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh and now, after I'm feeling all mushy and stuff, you provide me with a smile and laugh.

    Very cute Ron and well done...those tin cans will get you everytime ;)

    | Posted on 2008-05-23 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha ha ha, this is pretty funny though you should probably use less explanation marks. I love the way you wrote this and how everything flowed together perfectly.
    | Posted on 2008-05-23 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]

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