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the other side of the butterfly


Author: JanePlane
ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
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Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Description:




the other side of the butterfly



For the Blue Morpho
one side is iridescent blue
the other is brown
almost like a moth

Some might say that the brown side
Is deceptive
or maybe just drab

the fact that the morpho
cannot see it's shining brilliance
suggests not deceit
perhaps-- ignorance

Or maybe he's just fine
with the side he keeps to himself
and offended by others being so
captivated by him
only when he turns to leave.





Submitted on 2008-05-22 15:39:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  okay you used butterfly in the title....but so what...this is really different..the two sides, drab and brilliant...but the drab side might just be hiding brilliance....sometimes we really misjudge by what is on the outside..

there could be brilliance on the inside...something really worth getting that net and chasing into the sunset.

jacob
| Posted on 2012-03-03 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
  not really a poem? this is absolutely brilliant. i'm completely in love with it actually. my favorite is the last stanza. maybe i can just relate to it a lot, but i'm a strange bird.
| Posted on 2008-06-03 00:00:00 | by blackbird | [ Reply to This ]
  Woo.
A vote for you.
Good explanation.
| Posted on 2008-05-31 00:00:00 | by laffeytaffey | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice job here. I like the way you take a clichéd subject and address it anew.

Only mistake I saw was misspelling 'deceit' in line 10.

Peace, love and all that other junk,

Joe
| Posted on 2008-05-28 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
  Despite your explanation I still think I was spot on with my previous comment. It's freaky things like the Morpho that creationists press forward to advance their agenda. I'm not sure what exactly their agenda is, but it's obviously important to them, like poetry is important to the poet, and is as much an agenda of sorts.

Sieg Heil.
| Posted on 2008-05-23 00:00:00 | by machine dream | [ Reply to This ]


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