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    dots Submission Name: THE LOST LAMBdots
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    Author: obaid
    ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
    Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 148/93/34
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 665
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       just my thoughts...just my questions...wrote this while my girl was on the fone...i stared away at her and i couldn't help thinking all these things...i had written my thoughts on a paper lying down infront of me...so u see this is very impromptuo...i hope you like it...just wanted to share how i feel with the lot of you! :)>


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    dotsTHE LOST LAMBdots
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    I wonder at times what my future holds for me.
    Is it going to be as bleak as my past?
    Numbness and Pain simultaneously!
    But then I hope for the best 'cause you make me hope. You show me what i never could see...
    Love and Beauty!

    I received so much love in such a short time
    You are the giver; generous and insightful.
    But will this end too soon? Will I hurt again?...
    Will I walk for hours onwards? Alone and drenched in the rain?

    Sometimes I wonder so much that it begins to hurt.
    Begins to make me insane and puts me in a whirlwind of thoughts.
    Times...events...words said and unsaid...
    I'm swirling forever- I'm forever lost!




    Submitted on 2008-05-23 04:38:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this poem. It states the fears we all have about a relationship, and, well, life in general. I like the way the title relates to the peom as well. :D
    | Posted on 2008-06-18 00:00:00 | by Xillie | [ Reply to This ]
      Sometimes I wonder so much that it begins to hurt.


    you're in love.. she's being good to you... but just the thought that one day this might be ove r HURTS...
    so true ... I LOVED IT !!!

    Good Work
    | Posted on 2008-05-25 00:00:00 | by Dying Young | [ Reply to This ]


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