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THE LOST LAMB


Author: obaid
ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 148 /93 /34
Words: 122
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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just my thoughts...just my questions...wrote this while my girl was on the fone...i stared away at her and i couldn't help thinking all these things...i had written my thoughts on a paper lying down infront of me...so u see this is very impromptuo...i hope you like it...just wanted to share how i feel with the lot of you! :)>


THE LOST LAMB



I wonder at times what my future holds for me.
Is it going to be as bleak as my past?
Numbness and Pain simultaneously!
But then I hope for the best 'cause you make me hope. You show me what i never could see...
Love and Beauty!

I received so much love in such a short time
You are the giver; generous and insightful.
But will this end too soon? Will I hurt again?...
Will I walk for hours onwards? Alone and drenched in the rain?

Sometimes I wonder so much that it begins to hurt.
Begins to make me insane and puts me in a whirlwind of thoughts.
Times...events...words said and unsaid...
I'm swirling forever- I'm forever lost!




Submitted on 2008-05-23 04:38:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this poem. It states the fears we all have about a relationship, and, well, life in general. I like the way the title relates to the peom as well. :D
| Posted on 2008-06-18 00:00:00 | by Xillie | [ Reply to This ]
  Sometimes I wonder so much that it begins to hurt.


you're in love.. she's being good to you... but just the thought that one day this might be ove r HURTS...
so true ... I LOVED IT !!!

Good Work
| Posted on 2008-05-25 00:00:00 | by Dying Young | [ Reply to This ]


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