I think this poem is true. Love can hurt more then anything at times. I see the guy I love, with other girls all the time, and it hurts more then anything. Then all use him. I could have a chance with him, but I won't let myslef be with him because of my fears. I just wish to be that girl, and show him what true love is, I'm not sure if he'll ever know....
Anyways, love does hurt, that's no lie. You might be in pain now, but you won't forever. You'll find someone, who loves you, for you. And wants you, for you, and wants to spend the rest of their life with you. This girl, might have broken your heart, but it will heal :] Just give it time, everything takes time in life.
The only thing that really bugged me in this poem was the endding. Too be honest, I think you could've wrote more. Added something. Make it deeper, something. I'm not sure, I just kmow that I didn't like the ending so much.
Overall, this is a good poem though. And the fact it's your first poem, it's really good. For your first one. Keep working on it. Your writing will get stronger.
Keep your head up, things will get vetter. It just takes time. :]
It's got a lot of promise, but...it's just not original. Everyone can relate to what you're saying but it's because it's already been said 100 times over again. Take what your feeling and twist it into something different make it your own. Peace!