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    dots Submission Name: i hate you daddots
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    Author: supergirl_in_oh
    Elite Ratio:    1.67 - 29/122/52
    Words: 262
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsi hate you daddots
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    You killed me long ago; I had barely just reached eight
    How did you become the sole controller of my fate?
    Death toils at my imprisoned tortured soul
    For every slap that launched me to the floor
    Pain enthralls me, your words cut like a knife
    You say you love me, while you’ve taken my life
    Another burning bruise emerges upon my leg
    Unable to stop, regardless of how much I beg
    A life to disguise, a forced smile on my silenced lips
    A mask emplace, concealing my sea of emptiness
    You return with promises to wipe your crimes away
    This hell I’m enslaved in, I know it’s you I must obey
    I often wonder what ties me to this injurious place
    When you rule me with an iron fist that slaps me in the face
    Bloodied tears, gather and stain, you’ve hit me once again
    The bruises in time will fade, but the scars forever remain
    You call me you’re ‘Rose Bud’; I’m your little princess
    Yet you beat me unconscious, and leave me defenseless
    Lost so deep inside myself, I’ve now come to depend
    On these murderous rituals, when will they ever end?
    Truth accruing like some insurmountable debt
    Your abuse I can’t remember and yet cannot seem to forget
    There’s no escape, no one understands
    This love and hate that bind me to this man
    After all, in the end, he's still my only dad




    Submitted on 2008-05-23 16:13:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      much much much better :)
    | Posted on 2008-05-24 00:00:00 | by Bloodlust86 | [ Reply to This ]
      much much much better :)
    | Posted on 2008-05-24 00:00:00 | by Bloodlust86 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it...I know what your saying...ive been in your shoes...not an easy place to be in any means...the only thing i can see needs to be fixed is its structure...its very hard to read the way you have it...But other then that its amazing. :)
    | Posted on 2008-05-24 00:00:00 | by Bloodlust86 | [ Reply to This ]



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