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    dots Submission Name: Prozac and black coffeedots
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    Author: purplesun24
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    dotsProzac and black coffeedots
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    This pen can’t take me from this.
    Your at home fucking her again.

    I forget for awhile…

    As I suffocate my heart
    Beneath my pillow.
    I can hear it grasping
    For feelings
    I’m trying to forget.

    I’m still waiting…

    For everything to take on some meaning.

    And every time we meet
    Its continuous
    And full of repetition.

    My breath catches like in the movies,
    You smile,
    I smile.
    We say hello

    And I find myself thinking.

    I won’t say I love you,
    If you promise not to look at me that way again.

    Your making this impossible,

    I feel fragile ,
    And I can’t breathe again until you walk away…






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      I know this feeling...what is he/ she doing right now, Is he/she finding new love in my misery......I think of a worst feelings and what you described here has to be towards the top. Loved the poem.

    10Q,

    Spin
    | Posted on 2009-07-05 00:00:00 | by Spin | [ Reply to This ]
      your mind is obsessed, your thoughts dark, the future a treadmill. ppl move cities, country even just to get away from ppl they have broken up with. sometimes the only thing that works is to throw yourself into something new, even someone new. remind yourself the world is a bigger place and you have a bigger role to play in this world than just being someone's sidekick.

    mentally challenging your energies to good deeds (charity, community and the such) helps put things into perspective.

    reading your poems makes me reflect on my life. i survive and prosper because i have something i cherish, something that makes me forget. time dulls my memories. your poems bring those back.
    | Posted on 2008-12-30 00:00:00 | by bugsy | [ Reply to This ]
      
    I forgot reality for awhile.

    It goes on even if I don't think it. I can not help this nor can I look away...

    I want like everything to feel it but you want like everything to give it away to everyone but me...

    I feel this. Shame, shame- I know my name...

    I'm only complete without you yet... longing...

    Or, I just need my meds... Wait, I'm not ON meds!!! Well then; this IS that.

    Love it.

    | Posted on 2008-08-20 00:00:00 | by Ceyx | [ Reply to This ]
      i felt like this saturday night.
    it was uncomfortable and yet
    ...exciting.

    *hugs*

    there there, angiepoos.
    | Posted on 2008-05-25 00:00:00 | by silent strings | [ Reply to This ]
      You know? Honestly, when this piece began, it sounded rather angry, like this was going to be a venting or ranting type write.
    But as it progressed, I liked it more and more. It felt more powerful as the words continued. I'm in a situation like this, only he's not found another girl...yet.
    It's difficult to talk normally to the ones we love. In fact, it hurts more to see them than to remember.

    This write was done fairly well. I really liked how you get frustrated with the other person, like it's their fault you feel this way. Because sometimes, that is the way it feels.

    Continue writing! I liked your piece very much.
    (My favorite line: I won’t say I love you,
    If you promise not to look at me that way again.)
    | Posted on 2008-05-23 00:00:00 | by Raging Rain | [ Reply to This ]


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