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    dots Submission Name: Two Stepdots
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    Author: jkhutchings
    Elite Ratio:    1.23 - 3/6/22
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angst
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    dotsTwo Stepdots
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    the little box radio
    sat atop the tall dresser
    I could only see
    a small part of it
    music played in familiar tones
    Mama went about her chores
    she cleaned and cooked
    humming her favorite ones
    songs of the country
    soothed this Texas girl
    when I was eight
    we were given to my Dad
    she found a new man
    and we were in the way
    that was the last time
    I saw her I was eight
    my old man listened to
    the western tunes
    he played them on
    his guitar and sang
    I learned to play
    that six string box
    and fell in love
    with a new sound
    when my group practiced
    at our house
    he made fun and complained
    we fought about it so much
    that I stopped liking
    those songs of old
    I still have a hard time
    with it though him and I
    made amends my Mother and I
    never talked about it
    it and other things
    are left hanging
    but I miss my Ma.....








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