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    dots Submission Name: into the purple that is youdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsinto the purple that is youdots

    i told the moon where to go
    when it spied on me
    & slipped the black sapphire
    of my wounded heart
    beneath a hidden door
    that came to you.

    when i'm all crushing
    i grave my eyelashes
    like an island.
    this becomes a tiny map
    that melts into
    somebody else's dream
    of who i can be.

    some hush comes over me
    when i'm sleeping
    that makes me unsure
    when i awaken.
    is it the secret sun inside me,
    or another way
    to say, "i love you",
    that i've yet to find?

    i am not the oldest disciple
    of time
    but i'm a close runner up.
    & every moment that i sink into
    some soft version of love
    i remember
    that the miracle of learning
    is to know one's self.

    i do so
    through the autumn fingers
    i wrap into peoples lives.
    & i know
    that when the honesty
    of my secret brain is opened,
    it will find it's way
    into the purple that is you.

    Submitted on 2008-05-26 00:48:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "Autumn fingers" was a nice touch. It really gives the persona a beautiful feel of tragedy.

    Why is it that your pieces always come to me at such an oppurtune time? Is it a mere coincidence, or is it because of the mere fact that your pieces possess a tender atomic bomb that hits a city of emotions? I'm banking on the latter.

    | Posted on 2008-05-26 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]

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