This is good. Don't really observe or notice things much, cause well I don't really care about anyone or anything, but I get it. Um, Kind of makes you think a lot, which is good, don't get me wrong, but you kind of have to think more than you would want to be able to partake in this! Know what I mean?
interesting. I semi-agree with Corvus's intpretation. I also see how this could be a great philosophical poem, especially in consideation of the last two lines. Check the punctuation to polish it up, but you did a really good job w/ this.