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    dots Submission Name: Ironydots
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    Author: caveman
    Elite Ratio:    2.37 - 40/13/25
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 738
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       This is the one which keeps winning "awards" so please for the love of <insert divinity here> do your worst


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    dotsIronydots
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    A dead man sleeps to his own private dream
    locked in a cask of golden scream
    he feels only the coldness of the grave
    sees only the blackness that he craved
    smells his money waste away
    hears only the one thing he could not say
    tastes only his misstresses blade
    as it slides so smoothly into place
    through his blackened
    heart
    betrayed
    Bass Switala





    Submitted on 2008-05-26 05:59:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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