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    dots Submission Name: kissdots
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    Author: caveman
    Elite Ratio:    2.37 - 40/13/25
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       do you remember your first? Will you?


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    dotskissdots
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    I've never forgotten those first steps
    'pon enchanted shores.
    Some awkward, misguided, unsure,
    others victorious, passionate, and pure.
    Unknown mountains and vallies,
    unsmelt flowers
    untasted waters
    sweet as swans
    wondrous as willows
    Bass Switala





    Submitted on 2008-05-26 06:03:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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       I can relate. Short and simple. It really pulls the reader in. Your words really do create that definition for the past and the relationship that was shared and how you will carry it with you. Awesome portrayal.


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    | Posted on 2008-06-02 00:00:00 | by SingleRose | [ Reply to This ]


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