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    dots Submission Name: Losing Paindots

    Author: caveman
    Elite Ratio:    2.37 - 40/13/25
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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       a bittersweet moment in my life, fastest I've ever gotten over any woman, after her promised myself no more psychochicks, happily married a year later.

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    dotsLosing Paindots

    When an artists heart has a hole
    there is very little to be told.
    writ upon his face
    are the scars of his disgrace.
    His work is flawed, muse mute
    medium taunting where once it was flaunting
    It takes a while to mend the soul,
    for him to walk again brave and bold.
    He gets a grip upon his haste
    treads with caution and with grace
    Listning carefully for cupids flute
    and living each day to it's full no matter how daunting.
    To the reader take greatest care,
    an artists heart is a treasure
    afloat upon the air.
    Anything else he may offer to give
    is but sand in the desert when set beside
    the devotion, compassion, honesty.
    So if what you see it not to your taste
    nor can you accept what you see,
    be honest to him and yourself
    without fear of hurt feelings,
    anger, jealousy, or retribution
    and just leave him as you found him
    walking free in a forest, of concrete ubiquity.
    Bass Switala

    Submitted on 2008-05-26 06:16:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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