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    dots Submission Name: nervous dots

    Author: caveman
    Elite Ratio:    2.37 - 40/13/25
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Advice for the single guys out there, when the day comes, and she asks you what you want, just give her something simple that you want her to shoot for on that special day and let her go wild planning the rest. it's your day too y'know

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    dotsnervous dots

    With flowers in her hair
    she gazez at the moon
    through lacen clouds buffeted
    she is reminded of me
    Simple in appearance
    together we stand ground
    against the rushing world
    gazing at the beuty
    snarling at the crimes
    Our past be buried
    Our present, each other
    The future follows behind

    To me she is precious
    a fount of crystaline water
    never to be drained
    a castle to never know siege
    The end of a life long quest
    and the beginning of an oddessey

    For us there will be no tomorrow
    only today will matter
    For our children there will be no starvation
    for our today will be their yesterday

    We will love each other
    for the person
    our honesty and temper
    will bare and raze
    all obstacles in our way

    We will wed
    before all freinds
    and kin who choose to witness
    a sword at my side
    With flowers in her hair
    Bass Switala

    Submitted on 2008-05-26 06:31:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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