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    dots Submission Name: path or pain dots
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    Author: caveman
    Elite Ratio:    2.37 - 40/13/25
    Words: 599
    Class/Type: Prose/Religious
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       there is a difference between believing, and having a belief. I am a pagan, but also I love Jesus


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    dotspath or pain dots
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    In a field of green grass, nested trees, and flowing rivers,
    I stood with many people, some I knew, some were strangers.
    Before us lay two paths, one easy, alive, and free.
    The other dark, haunted, and ominous.

    There stood a Man, of glory, honor, and light.
    He told all, “Before you are two paths, it is your choice
    Which to take, but once began I cannot lend hand
    Until you meet me at the other side.

    Down one path is comfort, joy, and acceptance,
    The other holds danger, adventure, and strength.
    Choose wisely my lambs for there are wolves about,
    And as your Shepard I can only herd those who pass this test.”

    Being the Youth that I was I chose. Not the path of light
    Rather the path of hardships and scorn.
    Not because I was foolhardy for adventure,
    Instead I was intent on proving myself worthy.

    Hounds harassed Us at every turn, and even the foliage
    Seemed against us. I prevailed, keeping my eyes on my goal,
    Ignoring the calls of the birds as they taunted, and cursed
    As the path got denser, it’s footing becoming unsure, some fell

    I tried to help who I could, but some were beyond my meager skills
    Some I lent a shoulder to lean on until they found their strength
    Others I Berated into action calling to them “I am no better than
    You, you can do the same if you but try”
    The Rest I merely offered them a hand when they needed it most.

    We were all sore, and weary when we reached the other side,
    And we were all stronger in our hearts and minds.
    Some got a mere three steps across before failing, falling, sleeping
    Not I, I stood Proud, ready for more. And there he stood.

    Not a day older, not a mark, nor a stain, and still flowing Light.,
    He laughed at me, smiling like a father and said, “You who would
    Not quit, who took the lead and forced the others to finish with you.
    You are truly one of my Teachers. For you not only took the way of
    Darkness, you brought the light of the healer unto it.
    Go Forth, and Herd your own Flock.”

    “But Sir” said I “Who am I to herd a Flock, when I Lost so many
    on the Way. I am a poor choice.” He stood insistent, and put his
    arm upon my shoulder.
    “You are as fine choice as Any, they are not lost, Like you
    they will find their way eventually. That is why you are
    a good choice. Because you had the strength of Faith to let
    them go. The strength of heart to help the others, and the
    Strength of Mind to challenge me.” And so he handed me
    A Staff and said, “Now Go, and work my Wonders.”

    As I turned and looked upon those who would follow me
    as the lay gasping, smiling, laughing, I turned my eyes upon
    the hell that we had passed through and saw it was now easy,
    free, alive. The Sun chased away the Haunts, the birds and
    critters returned. I felt Joy in my heart, and Jesus in my soul


    © Bass Switala





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      this gave me shivers reading it, I don't know why lol
    but i really liked it, I could picture it well in my mind :)
    | Posted on 2008-06-02 00:00:00 | by KeeperOfLight | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. Well good job on blending you religions as I say you gotta follow your own heart

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-05-26 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      Can I just say that this is awesome and I will favor it You done a wonderful job here and I like your acceptance of all, and your spiritual blend
    | Posted on 2008-05-26 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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