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    dots Submission Name: Strings dots

    Author: caveman
    Elite Ratio:    2.37 - 40/13/25
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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       when you realize the relationship is going down in flames, bail gracefully

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    dotsStrings dots

    Flame and fire, cinders and smoke,
    it's all laid out in the songs we wrote.
    We were never meant to last,
    but to meet, share, and part in a flash.
    I'm gratefull for what was given,
    and thankfull for what was learned.
    I've finally healed from being so sorely burned.
    I set you free and wish you luck,
    but you won't let me help you,
    so I can't give a flying fuck.
    © Bass Switala

    Submitted on 2008-05-26 07:11:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      “Flame and fire, cinders and smoke,
    their all laid out in the songs we wrote.
    Love was never meant to last, you and I
    but meet to share and party our flesh rages.
    I am grateful for what was given and taken.
    Thankful for what was learned and earned
    finally healed from being sorely burned.

    I set you free and wished you luck,
    but you won't let me help you,
    so I can't give you another,
    one good flying duck.”

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    © Bass Switala
    | Posted on 2008-05-26 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]

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