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    dots Submission Name: Staring Contestdots
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    Author: Selene
    ASL Info:    20/f/ US
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 149/159/53
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 60
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 376



    Description:
       A little rough right now, i'm trying to figure out how to clean up the story so it is easier to follow without loosing the vaguness in it.


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    dotsStaring Contestdots
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    Those Blue Eyes
    Stubbornly looking
    into my own eyes
    staring and focused
    slightly bloodshot
    My own green eyes
    must show that
    I am despearatly
    Searching for something
    that just isn't there
    fake a smile
    break away
    accept the loss
    before to much
    slips out
    in this game.




    Submitted on 2008-05-26 10:59:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i dont see any clues that i can follow to get a meaning
    | Posted on 2008-05-26 00:00:00 | by kingsley | [ Reply to This ]


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