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    dots Submission Name: Clearing Cobwebs dots

    Author: forfila
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 354/310/188
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Rant/
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       Just a pure rant,,,,,no one should be offended ..

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    dotsClearing Cobwebs dots

    To beat writers block
    I write in rhyme, and what?
    Reminisce on why I was lost
    Try to word all that I came across
    Try to stay on the right side of my boss
    Dance but never double cross
    Walking unrealized blind like a seeing eye dog

    I can hear mother calling me to be hurry
    Telling me to be safe
    Theres all kinds of lost souls
    All looking to shift blame
    Warning shot one, you need to move swiftly
    fire two and its too late
    I begged you to come with me

    Such a beautiful few I know closely
    We move and grow slowly in hope and potency
    The included is the truth
    The views for a future not before thought of
    Taught by teachers, now witness these dreams built on love that is forever free

    A guest on this ladies planet
    Hearing from her and me
    the collaboration of love to reign and take effect
    To stand briefly complete
    To paint whats to be in the nether; right here in these nows of forever.

    Oh to be so foolish to hate hope
    I guess that is a part of me I will never know.

    Submitted on 2008-05-26 17:08:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Matt, This was really tight and seems as though it got your rhyme back on!
    I finally got on your new site - very well done

    Happy Day with lots of love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-05-28 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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