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    dots Submission Name: catfish dreams and bluegill wishes dots
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    Author: S.A.M.
    ASL Info:    26/f/xx
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 476/419/137
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotscatfish dreams and bluegill wishes dots
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    A ripple breaks the calm surface

    a white shadow coming to rest

    on the wind-broken mirorr.

    Waiting, staring into the face of time,

    the reflection of white disapears

    bobbing back to the portrait seconds later

    untill finally it is gone.

    The line grows taught

    the struggle beggins

    adrenilin floods the mind,

    victory, the trophey is yours.

    Release the creature back to the wild

    it lives to bite yet another day.

    The day grows to night,

    a retirement till the sun awakens.

    Laying beneath flowering stars

    the sounds of the world blanket the tired

    a comforter sewn from nights lulaby.

    Softly the melody fades

    as heavy eyes close on the day.



    Sarah McCall




    Submitted on 2008-05-26 20:37:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Love the poem, never really heard a fisherman, or woman, poem done quiet so well. I like the way you build up te anticipation. Very nice. Some good news also, I am bringing back "The Puppet" to Elite Skills. So look for them, I know you enjoy them.

    Love Eternally,
    Shane
    | Posted on 2008-09-17 00:00:00 | by faded color | [ Reply to This ]
      Sarah
    I Like my Good Friend also a Ron also enjoy fishing
    The only thing is I could never understand people who catch fish to throw them back
    When I fish I keep everything unless of course they are to small then back they go
    But Honestly a Great description of the moment when one hooks a trophy fish
    EXCELLENT JOB!!!
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-08-25 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Sarah, I've always been an avid fisherman, and your excellent verse vividly portrays that moment when the fishing float first bobs, then sinks to signal that a fish is on! An exciting moment for any fisherman!

    Congratulations on a poem that every fisherman will relate to!
    | Posted on 2008-05-27 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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