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    dots Submission Name: Grown Updots
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    Author: GiveMeTheGun
    ASL Info:    20/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 108/85/15
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 836
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    Bytes: 714



    Description:
       My experience with then and now .


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    dotsGrown Updots
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    today you grew up
    because you didnt laugh like you used to
    you didnt joke like you used to
    just told me one day i would, too

    i always wanted to grow up
    before you told me i had to
    before i knew that i had to
    now i wonder why i wanted to

    i wish i didnt have to grow up
    because its harder than i'm used to
    it's the hardest thing to do
    just not me, but for you, too

    today I grew up
    and now that i know what you go through
    your laugh sounds like it used to
    you joke the way you used to

    maybe you're still a little different
    not just you, but me, too .




    Submitted on 2008-05-26 23:23:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem is beautiful imrannn . . . . . . .

    I absolutely loved it. I kinda understand what you mean . . . . . . We all wanna grow up because we want a sense of freedom . . . . we all have our own reasons for wanting to grow up but when the time finally comes its tougher than we expected and sometimes we wanna go back to the way things used to be. Honeslty. . . . . life used to be so easy. I don't know what happened. Maybe we just grew up. I know I'm not 19 yet . . . . but I think I kinda know what youre goin through.

    This poem is very relatible, and I thought the tone shift was interesting.

    Overall - great job.

    I love you girl and HAPPY BELATED BAY!

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