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    dots Submission Name: Divinedots
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    Author: The Gadfly
    ASL Info:    51/M/Moreno Valley, CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 1035/1330/360
    Words: 18
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 74
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 144



    Description:
       A cinquain; format 22 syllables in 5 lines as 2 4 6 8 2.


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    dotsDivinedots
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    Divine
    what little grace
    mankind truly merits,
    and all one receives is truly
    divine.







    Submitted on 2008-05-27 06:19:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What jaycee said with little sugarcanes and icecream added to the top just to get this comment to go through ya know>
    | Posted on 2008-05-28 00:00:00 | by obsidiandreams | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, but I think the word Devine at the beginning is superflous and awkward. Leave "Devine" as the title and let the rest stand.

    I always enjoy short bits of thought and wisdom. Those pieces that are rather like Haiku, but not quite, and this one fits right in there.

    Peace

    jan
    | Posted on 2008-05-27 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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