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    dots Submission Name: The Night Councildots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    21/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 850/651/234
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsThe Night Councildots
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    The starlight dims
    And the future, once again, becomes unreadable
    Behind the unaccustomed eyes
    And the smoke above the distant chimneys.

    The dawn will be gray though,
    I wallow in belief
    As another unfamiliar face sits next to me
    On a painted grass.

    Even as the shallow breaths vaporise,
    Next to me sits a mystery
    And as it opens it's palms
    I see it's lines are…just as disconcerting.

    There are no words to be wasted
    Beneath the nightshade of a century
    Hundreds of branches of it
    And a single lonely soul that stands immobile and mute.

    It is a rather strange assembly
    And I dare not disrupt the quiet understanding.
    The wind grows and trembles.
    We go to war.






    Submitted on 2008-05-27 11:36:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You write with a beautiful elegance that illuminates the darkness you wish to share. This is the second piece of yours I have read, and the second one that has impressed me.

    "Next to me sits a mystery" Just the flow of this single line merits attention and praise, let alone the piece as a whole.
    | Posted on 2008-07-01 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ]
      This verse seems to aptly present the mood of a premonition of war! While war is too often glorified in theatre, it is the most vile and terrible event that mankind gets involved with, and its circumstances are always tragic, even if a strategic or politically desirable outcome is achieved!

    Excellent, contemplative verse, lovely lady!
    | Posted on 2008-05-27 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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