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    dots Submission Name: It is Not a Swan Songdots
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    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.76 - 415/433/130
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 788
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 261



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    dotsIt is Not a Swan Songdots
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    it is
    a dove not cooing
    in the side yard

    it is a soft sound
    of wings that
    flutter

    growing louder
    as the thing
    bangs into the fence

    to death

    headless




    Submitted on 2008-05-27 13:47:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I was reading through some of these
    and found a few that are irritating for me to
    read (Those with double spaced lines)
    Therefore I did not read them.
    This one however is nice and
    easy on the eyes.
    I like it almost as
    much as I dislike
    pigeons.
    | Posted on 2011-09-17 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      makes me think of that song by peter gabriel back in the day...'the family and the fishing net' just because of the line in it: Headless chickens

    i like the momentum of the piece.
    the sacrifice at the end is a nice touch...

    now it makes me think of that cohen song, anthem...the bit about the holy dove being bought and sold and how she's never free...

    eh, i do go on, don't i?
    lol

    | Posted on 2008-06-05 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      Animal cruelty always makes me laugh, or maybe this poem was actually quite funny.

    The last line I didn't quite get, did the poor bird decapitate itself?
    | Posted on 2008-05-28 00:00:00 | by machine dream | [ Reply to This ]


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