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    dots Submission Name: Memoirs of Coffee Shopdots
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    Author: Persephone
    ASL Info:    19/f/ US
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 328/352/136
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 678
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    Description:
       This is a writing exercise that I did today while waiting in line for coffee. It was actually a random piece.


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    dotsMemoirs of Coffee Shopdots
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    Sometimes she wonders if he
    could ever think about the things,
    that haunt her mind, her heart,
    things feared from the very start.

    Sometimes her worries are whisps,
    sometims they cloud around like fog,
    And her fearing of losing her love,
    fits her heart like a downy glove.

    And she wonders if she notices
    that sometimes it's always on her mind
    for no reason at all, except it is,
    Proving she really is just a kid.

    With such a paralyzing fear,
    she won't tell anyone around,
    not him, not her friends, not one,
    And prays every night that this,
    this love is not Done.




    Submitted on 2008-05-27 18:19:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I Have to agree 100% with this piece! There is no state of mind worse than to have the feelings of uncertanty within your relationship; along with the added elements of self insecurities.

    Well delivered; Thanks for Sharing!!


    Timmy S. Edgar 2008
    | Posted on 2008-11-29 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]


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