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    dots Submission Name: You Think It's Funnydots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I'm bored, and i need to be sleeping, but I can't sleep. If you've had too much of me today, save it for tomorrow.


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    You think it's funny
    that singing birds make me sleepy,
    but I am used to being up
    at that predawn hour
    their twittering begins,
    the sweet sentinels of morning
    telling me to sleep,
    but I never do before
    you get home
    and lie down by my side.





    Submitted on 2004-07-02 17:27:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      reminded me of Romeo and Juliet...

    it's the nightengale...a melody of the night...no it's the lark...the herald of the morn..

    oh either way, the birds' songs have me confused..i have to look out the window and see if i can go back to bed...

    singing birds make me sleepy also.
    | Posted on 2011-09-05 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice piece. You did a good job with it. Just 2 very minor nits:

    That their twittering begins – ‘THAT’ SHOULD BE ‘WHEN’
    The sweet sentinels of morning – DELETE ‘THE’
    | Posted on 2004-07-08 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      has he been up to? Makes me think the waiting up's not worth the time. Get some sleep girl, unless he's on night shift and can prove it, it is not worth the deprivation.
    | Posted on 2004-07-05 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      I hate birds, but not because they tweet, but because they take a crap on my car every morning...thats what bugs me...


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    | Posted on 2004-07-04 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]
      very sweet. do you work at night or something? i think i recall you mentioning something about that. i'm not usually up at the hour when the birds start singing. not a morning person, although when i have been up at that time, it sure is beautiful.
    | Posted on 2004-07-03 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      well I usually don't be up so long although I can't sleep some days too. then I usually fall asleep at 5 am, a little early for the birds. but it must be nice to hear them. your images are great and I love the ending. sweet. very well done, Amy.
    | Posted on 2004-07-03 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      thats a really nice poem, and i quite enjoyed it!
    im a fan of short poems that can pull it off and that did, keep it up
    | Posted on 2004-07-02 00:00:00 | by madrox | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this poem. I usually have trouble sleeping and don't actually fall asleep till i hear the birds sing before the sun is up. Then i usually wake up around dinner time and do the same thing again. I need a better bed time lol. This poem just reminds me of that. I really thought it wasa nice poem.
    Jan,
    | Posted on 2004-07-02 00:00:00 | by Jan | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that this is just a sweet sentiment. Right? He thinks it's funny, but in a sweet way. You stay up for him despite the sleepiness. OK, I don't really have anything to say.
    | Posted on 2004-07-13 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm trying to catch up on some of your poems that i have missed. I am so glad I found this one. It is very sweet. It is amazing the power that certain sounds and smells hold over us.

    I love the gentleness of this piece. The love shown for someone who you long to have at your side. Like having them there offers a safe refuge for you in your sleep. Aww!
    | Posted on 2004-07-19 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]


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