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    dots Submission Name: Nightdots
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    Author: Rainmaker
    ASL Info:    23 / M / Finland
    Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 45/50/19
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 599
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1246



    Description:
       Something that needs little sanding to be done ;) Anyhow, this is how i have been planning the voices to go:
    Normal: Quite clear voice
    ( ) : "Raspin'" 'metal' voice
    And if you are wondering where the ( ) sections really go, well they start little before the normal line ends..
    And the music style is about little progressive rock/metal styled... or so i have been thinkin' :)
    Hope i remembered to put all in here now...


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    dotsNightdots
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    As sun moves, down the
    horizon - the night reigns
    Moon shines upon us
    And shades of gray rules
    These hills and lakes
    So old and so bold
    So beautiful!

    [Bridge]
    From the days of old
    The sun and the moon
    They travel -- hand by hand

    [Chorus]
    Tonight, tonight, tonight
    We dance
    In the night
    In trance
    We love you night

    We are the night!

    Oh how sweet the shadows?
    How amazing the silver light
    If I could catch it
    For the day's blight
    Oh night! Save us!
    Save us now! - From the sun!
    From the sun!

    [Bridge]
    From the days of old
    The sun and the moon
    They travel -- hand by hand

    [Chorus]x2 [ 2nd one with the stuff in ( ) ]
    Tonight, tonight, tonight! ( Tonight )
    We dance ( Dance )
    In the night ( The night )
    In trance ( Trance )
    We love you night ( Love you )

    ( The night is gone
    The sun comes up
    Oh night.. night
    Night, I miss you
    Oh night... )

    We dance In trance In the night! ( yeah, yeah yeah )




    Submitted on 2008-05-28 18:55:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      well written. so wonderful and worded
    | Posted on 2008-07-29 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      Personally, I think that the night is such an apologetic creature. And it is this feat that allows us to really fall in love with it.

    After all, a lot of us our only beautiful in the dark.

    I love the fact that you're approach would be along the lines of progressive rock. At least that way, the music can compliment its proud and seemingly unapologetic vibe. I think that other genres would just make it seem tacky or confusing.

    Anyway... goodluck with it.
    | Posted on 2008-05-29 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]


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