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    dots Submission Name: Promises Are Tears Waiting to Falldots
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    Author: Peggy Paris
    ASL Info:    61/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 747/570/167
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsPromises Are Tears Waiting to Falldots
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    Too often they're given,
    But seldom they're kept.
    Promises, promises
    Fill the tears that I've wept.

    Is there a tomorrow
    For hopes gone astray?
    Promises, promises
    Washed my dreams far away.

    I won't ask for many;
    I'll give but a few.
    Promises, promises---
    How I wish all were true!





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      Happy Day Sharon! This was a nice little rhyming package that reminds me of losing my first love...

    Hope all is going well with your garden and yard and the sunshine is still shining! My fire pokers are all in bloom as are my lupine - isn't the season wonderful!

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-05-30 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      There are promises to be made,
    and there are promises to be kept!

    I can't remember the rest of that verse or where it came from, but your delightful poem reminded me of it!

    I love this short, but excellent poem! Promises are like Rainbows; always radiant, and their truth is more imagined than real!

    Delightful poem, lovely lady!
    | Posted on 2008-05-29 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      a nice little read i thought. i like the repetition of "promises promises" in the three stanzas, and my personal favourite was the first stanza. the first two lines in particular stood out to me because that's the reality of the subject in question and i think you portrayed it very well.
    | Posted on 2008-05-29 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]


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