Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Things to be saiddots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 41/64/76
    Words: 1500
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 625
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1900



    Description:
       the spacign don't work,..


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThings to be saiddots
    -------------------------------------------


    . Where
    . You
    . Come
    . To
    . Walk
    . And where you must go,
    . You never even know,
    . What are the things to be said,
    . But once you really see,
    . You’ll never talk the same
    . Once those thoughts are sighted,
    . You will speak a new
    . Your whole embodiment changed,
    . In this world of unspoken voices,
    . You
    . Will
    . Walk
    . An
    . Open
    . Road.




    Submitted on 2008-05-29 15:47:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      it to style odd an bit a, but then again experimentation, change, chaos, is kinda what the piece is about so it justifies itself and works. i liked it, not sure if it's ready for chisel in stone yet. might wanna drop some caps and commas and periods and add a sentence in the middle.
    | Posted on 2008-06-06 00:00:00 | by caveman | [ Reply to This ]
      pretty cool.
    i
    think
    it
    has
    something
    fresh
    about these idea about change
    | Posted on 2008-05-31 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    161954

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    The Promise written by annie0888
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Bond written by saartha
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Every..... written by jackz
    Fasade written by jackz
    Deaf Dumb and Blind is no excuse written by poetotoe
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    untitled written by Chelebel
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Wish written by Daniel Barlow
    Transparent written by Daniel Barlow
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Trails written by Daniel Barlow
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    Push written by JanePlane
    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    True Death written by layDsayD
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    One Day written by WriteSomething

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry