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    dots Submission Name: Things to be saiddots
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    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 41/64/76
    Words: 1500
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 617
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1900



    Description:
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    dotsThings to be saiddots
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    . Where
    . You
    . Come
    . To
    . Walk
    . And where you must go,
    . You never even know,
    . What are the things to be said,
    . But once you really see,
    . You’ll never talk the same
    . Once those thoughts are sighted,
    . You will speak a new
    . Your whole embodiment changed,
    . In this world of unspoken voices,
    . You
    . Will
    . Walk
    . An
    . Open
    . Road.




    Submitted on 2008-05-29 15:47:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      it to style odd an bit a, but then again experimentation, change, chaos, is kinda what the piece is about so it justifies itself and works. i liked it, not sure if it's ready for chisel in stone yet. might wanna drop some caps and commas and periods and add a sentence in the middle.
    | Posted on 2008-06-06 00:00:00 | by caveman | [ Reply to This ]
      pretty cool.
    i
    think
    it
    has
    something
    fresh
    about these idea about change
    | Posted on 2008-05-31 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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