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    dots Submission Name: Figure It Outdots
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    Author: jayisademon
    ASL Info:    20/m/il
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 90/47/51
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Prose/Me
    Total Views: 80
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1436



    Description:
       Shallow Water Blackout is the name of a song from Every Time I Die. I thought that it had a nice ring to it, and would work nicely.


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    dotsFigure It Outdots
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    My head is underwater
    and Im preparing for yet
    another shallow water blackout.

    Another tide to sweep
    me to the abyss.
    And I take another drink
    and make a face.
    Why does salt water
    taste of piss?

    Just another disappoinment
    in a long line of one after
    another, and another etcetra.

    And just like abra cadabra
    I am found.
    Pulled from the magician's
    hat and doused in a drinking
    cup.

    I think I've finally figured it all out.
    I've learned to embrace the things
    that I am.
    Hateful, vengeful, and bitter to boot.

    But is it really all that glum?
    I'd rather be considered
    unpleasant than all together dumb.

    Embrace, embrace.
    All talk and wordplay.
    Is it really so strange
    that the politician
    who preaches love
    has nothing interesting to say.

    Doesn't the dictator catch
    the eye just a little better?
    With a godlike following,
    and only the best of attire
    when our prophet comes
    I hope he comes dressed for
    the ball.

    I've got it figured out
    just in time,
    because its time for the guns to come out.
    Just in time for another shallow water
    Blackout.





    Submitted on 2008-05-29 22:28:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      very insightful, great phrasing. i absolutely love the stanza about wordplay,

    overall i thought it was fascinating
    | Posted on 2008-05-31 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      For me it reminds me more of that feeling when you're extremely drunk. One moment you're ok and then your sick and ok again. I liked this line: "I'd rather be considered
    unpleasant than all together dumb." That's something I can relate to.
    | Posted on 2008-05-30 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      comes across as a bit bi-polar, apathetic one moment gi-joe the next...
    | Posted on 2008-05-30 00:00:00 | by caveman | [ Reply to This ]



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