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    dots Submission Name: Seasonal Interludedots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       Happy Beautiful Friday ES wordsmiths!!!
    Enjoy the day & BE IN the NOW
    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    ps: Go outside & dance around and enjoy the sun, rain, clouds, whatever!!!


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    dotsSeasonal Interludedots
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    Spring is not quite ready
    to relinquish her grip
    Taunting Summer
    temperatures rise ~ only to dip

    Brown grounds thirst
    turn green with a sip
    Fading Winter
    he releases his grip

    Warm sun rays
    a hot kiss on the lip
    Change isn't permanent
    more like taking a trip

    Soft winds whisper
    singing this tip -
    A cloud bursting rain
    starts life as a drip.
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      Brought back memories of an Indian summer this year. Many "ips", but there is nothing bad about that. Good rhthym. Just a comment: Your style reminds me of the young Lewis Carrol when he was being serious.
    | Posted on 2008-11-01 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is delightful, Tiffany! It most aptly describes Spring's lingering, keeping Summer away for just a little while longer! Nice work, lovely lady!
    | Posted on 2008-06-23 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Tiff, this wonderful poem of yours has certainly captured exactly what we've been experiencing here, too! Hopefully, we'll get some needed rain tonight; it's very unusual for May to be as dry as this May has been. Really good job on this poem! :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2008-05-30 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Lots of "ip"s here, tiff. Oo

    This really captures the last few weeks. The weather has been psychotic, going warm and then going cold. It won't make up it's mind.

    IT'S DRIVING ME CRAZY!!!

    It's supposed to rain today. Blargh. The weather always likes to rain on my parade.

    Interesting poem, to say the least. The many "ip"s seem to take away from it somewhat, though. I might try adding a few more rhyme sounds if I were you.

    But I'm not you, so who am I to say?

    ~AsiaticFox
    | Posted on 2008-05-30 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]


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