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    dots Submission Name: that soldierdots

    Author: annezah
    ASL Info:    19/f/long island NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.5 - 14/15/16
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsthat soldierdots

    I don't want to feel,
    Those cold salty tears,
    Roll down my face,
    Never again.
    Those things,
    Are now horrible,
    I wish I hadn't yelled,
    No more I love yous,
    Will bring you back.
    The day you left,
    I screamed and yelled,
    I hate you,
    But now I want you here,
    I NEED you here,
    But your really gone.
    I wish the rain clouds,
    Would go away,
    Because now,
    Night and day,
    It's all a dark shade of grey.
    They never come back,
    I know this now.
    I wish I never had to cry,
    Never had to frown.
    Then that face,
    The one I would die to to see again,
    Showed itself in my head.
    I knew when they came to the door,
    All my worries and fears,
    Come to the shore.
    I fell to the ground,
    Your picture clutched closely,
    To my heart,
    As I weep.
    For the first time,
    I really truly am alone,
    I really wanted You to come home.
    my hero come back
    that soldier ill never forget

    Submitted on 2008-05-30 11:26:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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