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    dots Submission Name: Journey's End, Pt. I and IIdots
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    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    19/M/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    7.19 - 135/97/95
    Words: 324
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       I wrote this after I read "Raven Quest" by Sharon Stewart. I loved the book so much, that when it ended, I was sad.

    It's not very special, nor is it all that good (at least, in my opinion), but I hope you like it nonetheless. I just wish it came out better.

    I'm my own worst critic, though.


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    dotsJourney's End, Pt. I and IIdots
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    I.

    And so my friends,
    the Journey's end.

    How joyous it is to be here in the new land!
    The many days we travelled
    have left us weary.
    Death followed close behind,
    mocking our every step, waiting for us to fail.

    But now, open your eyes and see!
    How fat the land! How bright the sun!
    Peace, the noon day song!

    The hero, he brought us here.
    His life was never valuable to him.
    Cast out by those hating him, he searched long and hard
    for the gift to heal their wounds.
    Now they must weep in shame.
    He returns with honour,
    with kora.

    And so my friends, we are now home.
    And so my friends,
    the Journey's end.

    II.

    As we rest our weary souls, we look to the night sky.
    The Lord has smiled upon us.

    The Journey is now over. True, this is a cause
    for rejoicing, for much praise! But the tears come steadily.

    Why do I cry? For we are now safe,
    we have nothing to fear.
    It is the hero. He is off again.

    One Journey's end is another's beginning.
    Feelings of gladness are joined by feelings of sorrow.
    My heart has been lifted, but it has also been torn.

    It is life. Life is happiness and misery.
    I cling to him, begging him to stay.
    This is not easy for him either.

    "My face you shall not see for a long time.
    I shall miss your spirit, the fire that rages within you.
    You have proven yourself one of strength.

    Now, continue strong. Do not cry much longer.
    I shall return one day. This is my word,
    and it shall not come to nothing. No, it will not fade away
    until it has been fulfilled."

    Oh hero! Farewell! Our hearts go with you!

    And so my friends, our Journey ends.
    Hero's begins.




    Submitted on 2008-05-30 11:35:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I absolutely love this.. I haven't read Ravenquest, but after reading this it makes me want to pick it up and devour it.. I am a big science fiction and fantasy buff and am always happy to see someone writing within either of those genres..
    This is well written and flows nicely.. The depiction of the hero and his life long quests is perfect and it brings the unwritten story behind thid to life for me..
    Great read!

    Tiffany aka Maskannai
    | Posted on 2008-06-01 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]


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